Hi, professional poet speaking here. I actually have my first published bundle in the making here.
Here's my try:
Here's one of my earlier works:
Constructive criticism appreciated!
Here's my try:
yo, yo, fool
i am cool
you are the noob in toribash
that's why your head is what i bash
you are no toribash
you are a tori-TRASH
that's right, i beat you
because dead is you
the curb stomp is my move
just kidding the shovel is my move
it's arglax, master of all people
and you are all my dead people
i have money, money, too much
but my second name is not butch
Here's one of my earlier works:
Hey itz me, yo i beat you
who do i beat? yoyo, you !
cuz that what u are
a yoyo
you go down in the ring
then get up with out no bling !!
why do i beat u?
cuz that's what i do
itz how i rolllll
and at night i go for a strolllll
then i smoke som w33d
after i p33d
on your corpse
because you're dead
beaten and dead
peace over & out yo
Constructive criticism appreciated!
f=m*a syens
Originally Posted by Arglax
Hi, professional poet speaking here. I actually have my first published bundle in the making here.
Here's my try:
Here's one of my earlier works:
Constructive criticism appreciated!
Professional? Widen up your grammar and your poetic devices.
