You waste so many time, 300 frames, which is more than half of the replay for just an opener. Openers should be entertaining and "active", im not telling you that slow openers are boring, what i mean is that you should have done an opener more atractive to watch.
Dms are ok, nothing too impresive as you know how to make cool DMs. Maybe you should take advantage of that and start being more creative with your style.
Pose was cool.