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4 days, already sent back to page 3 with no criticism.
Please,

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The opener was basic enough, I really hated the contraction of your arm and wrist.
It just looked so abrupt and without purpose.
Touching ukes hand was not necessary and did not add any flavor to the replay so I would avoid doing that in the future.
The followup was, decent. You could have done something much more impressive but I guess the strange twist lift fell in rather well.
The kick was not bad but it could have been much better. Either trying for somehting that looks like a more solid hit or something that did more damage would have solved any issues I have with it. The follow up kicks were okay, I did like the last one a lot.
From there the replay should have ended. If you wanted a decap that bad you should have skeeted your hand.
When people crawl to a part of ukes body after a decent or good replay it sickens me. Especially when nothing impressive happened afterwards. The only somewhat redeemable aspect of that crawl is the very end where you take ukes lumbar and hit it to his head. HOWEVER, because self damage was not on it looked bad, it did not add anything because to the viewer there was no damage done and no reason to do that.
Overall an okay replay but it could have been better if you would have skeetcapped instead of feuobadsjklf crawl.

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I am very sorry for Dram, I kinda broke his logic a few minutes ago.
Nice opener.
Pretty good DMs.
As dram said, dont frekin crawl.
The artillery skeetbutnotreallyaskeet was eh.
Overall, pretty good.

You're improving

First bit was cool, though your left knee twitched getting the lift

First kick looked kinda weak

Bit after that where you went for Uke's lower body was kinda messy

Transition to get to the head and the decap was ew

Don't like w/e you did with the arm

Skeet-thingy was interesting

I like skeets
Also, grab manip. Nuff said

everything looked pretty good to me up until after the boom
it felt a little less professional afterwards, really stiff and random
kick skeet was pretty cool

8/10, beginning and boom were really cool

Thanks man! I worked a lot on this. I feel proud of it even though they say 'don't grab in a manip'.

dont grab in a manip if it doesnt flow or look clunky. it sorta flows here but i think it looks clunky
hits were nice though. grab wasnt the best but you got some nice destruction
i like the skeet, even though the neck lived