help me refine this replay please. what did I do wrong?

hue2shig is a skype entry thingy. hue3shig is the altered version.

Which was better? and what was wrong with them?

first one was better. i also dont see much wrong with any of them just that you were out of flow in the beginning.

I had no control over the opener, they made one.

You know whats good? helpful comments.