Listen here.
The stroke lines are to big.
Lines on the ankles,dont do them,
Add more platinum,quicksilver,vulcan.
Put some white(or maybe a bit light-gray) lines as overlay.
Make the screens in
photoshop or
gimp,to have better quality on each screen.
6/10.
P.S.
Paint.net sucks banana cream pie with squirty condoms on it...uh...what did i just write
?