^Please give constructive criticism next time, it'll help him out alot.
And i quite like the video, only things i can say is that the intro was too long, to some i guess it wouldn't mind, and there you need more camera movement, as the guys said up there. One more thing is that i can see the cursor on the screen, try keyframing, then move the mouse off to the side before you start recording.
Other then that it was a cool video. Way better then my first vid. 7/10
I hope you become a really good toribash video maker in the future, Good luck man.