The opener looked a bit strange.
That first boom was nice, but the grab kinda killed your flow.
Your legs and the kick were also quite a bit stiff.
The next boom (Not sure because the dms were seperate) had a nice transition from the first boom.
However, it could've been more destructive. (Like hitting that crotch block off for another dm)
The end was a bit too random, and it didn't look too good.
You also didn't pose.
Work on your openers. Make sure they have some way of gaining some speed and that they look good.
I think you got your booms down, but, if you aim them more accurately, you could get bigger booms.
Work on posing, I'm sure you are able to make one.