I think you need some practise. Yes, it's your first vid, I'm aware of that. You need better camerawork and effects. No transitions at all, that's not good at all. No effects, transitions or camerawork, just replays with music on top of it. Try to edit your next vid, don't just put the replays in a video editing program and paste music on it. You need better replays aswell, but this is not the place to discuss it. I'm not a videomaker or anything. I'm just trying to help you out.
And please, turn off the sound when you're recording. It's very annoying and not very good in videos. All in all, you need some practise, like I mentioned earlier.
