Although I think you could have boomed the first hit and got the crotch piece out I can't see anything wrong with it(But I don't like the first part since I hate things like that I excluded it)
I think you should try some sort of bigger engage distance, and make your way to him or start some what close and work your way away from uke and back to him, but inbetween do some spins for momentum and destroy uke with style etc.