In my point of view on a parkour, And if i'm going to be harshies mc harshie
Then let's go
You do way to much fucking about with jump setups, and it seems like you didn't give a shit of the outcome in what that run was at the start, Throughout the replay it was twitchy, try sticking to moves longer than just rapidly throwing something on it and pretty much wrecking the flow and momentum of that move in it self.
But. I did actualy fancy that spin up towards the ledges, constant speed with minor twitches, But from there on as you said yourself, you got ulltra lazy.
You got the estetickst of parkours jumping down. just work on your balance and try to not flop around to much, from there on i'd say your on your way to become a neat Traceur (parkourer)
-Cheers