hi olivia, since you seem to show at least some interest with learning how to replaymake ill cnc both replays for you and how i feel about them
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olivia
lazily
is a word id use to describe most of the current replays youve posted. overall, your replays show to be from a player that has interest in toribash as a game, and that replaymaking isnt something theyve taken interest in till very recent, which i assume is actually the case. these replays generally are very very twitchy and show that every few frames you change your mind on whats going on with the replay and it inevitably makes the replay look very odd
anyways, let me speak about the replays you have posted
olivia. i cattivi pensieri.
opener until 445 was genuinely a very nice part of the replay, and i liked it i must say
from then on to about 425 you then decided to totally contradict what you just did and throw your left leg behind you and totally come to a stop where nothing happens in the replay for about 20 frames. try avoid doing things like this as it ruins the replay
i like footgrabs but the fact u specifically went for this foot grab was very offensive to me
split was meh and you move awkwardly until launch
launch was ok and the dms were fine i especially like the decap that kick was very cool
flailing was very ugly and the last dms are meh i guess just kinda looked like you wanted to add as much as you could to the replay
overall, coming from a dueler who doesnt have any prior knowledge to replay making, its a decent start.
olivia & gentleman. it's nine o'clock on a saturday.
opener was pretty terrible in this one, in all honesty, but considering that you
claim this opener isnt by you then im not going to talk about it
460 onwards was very twitchy and to me it looked like an attempt at a manipulation replay but youre forgetting one of the main fundamentals of replaymaking and that is to rotate uke as well. just keeping uke afloat doesnt really do much for the replay and generally looks pretty terrible
the hit was a 5 dm hit i think and thats honestly not too bad, i feel with a little tweaking you couldve traded the pec for the glute or even got them both, but it doesnt really matter
follow up to the next kick was honestly fine too and the dms from it are ok
onwards from there to the pose was very good, i must say
this one, id say the beginning of this was actually terrible and, even though you claim someone else made the opener, i cant quite make out any clear cut that you edited from and it looks like you made this entire replay, but i guess ill take your word for it
anyway, the ending of this replay was
much better than the last and generally i can see improvement between two replays
overall, work on twitching and sticking to one idea and focus a little more on how you move and try to develop a style for yourself
best of luck :)
note: also, using full stops in replay names is MY THING